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Post by jamestheironpeach on Dec 4, 2008 19:20:15 GMT -5
I have to say, your a whole other person then on chat ( usually) .. This essay actually helped me out. I really agree with you that it is, well um...perfect.
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Post by Darknezz on Dec 4, 2008 19:28:38 GMT -5
It's really good, but you need to proof read it for commas and spelling mistakes. In your second sentence, you messed up "Though" with "Thought."
Other than that, it seems great.
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Post by evilplans on Dec 4, 2008 19:31:49 GMT -5
all i can say is that its great travis, i would say something else but i think i need a higher level of maturity to actually understand it. not that its confusing, but i think i'll be able to relate and understand it or something as time goes on...
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Post by thecosmicfly on Dec 4, 2008 19:46:37 GMT -5
Proof reading and putting spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read is all I can recommend. The work itself is fantastic.
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Post by Travis on Dec 4, 2008 19:49:39 GMT -5
Proof reading and putting spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read is all I can recommend. The work itself is fantastic. yah the spacing and paragraphs are correct in the actual essay. The forum didn't want to work with me. |
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Post by SnowOwl96 on Dec 4, 2008 19:55:18 GMT -5
Now that was really good. I understood everything you said.  |
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Mirei
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Post by Mirei on Dec 4, 2008 20:57:20 GMT -5
This is really well-written, Travis.
Good point also. -nods-
It's awesome~!
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Reaper5103
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i fucking knew it
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Post by Reaper5103 on Dec 4, 2008 21:09:37 GMT -5
it was great and thank you for explaining the fail rate of this forum cuz i was gonna say space it out more
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Post by AznSenzation on Dec 4, 2008 21:33:50 GMT -5
very insightful, inspirational, moving, and good use of words i might say. College level writing, which you are a college student. great job.
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Post by bugait on Dec 6, 2008 7:50:30 GMT -5
It was an amazing read, and simply put by you perfect. I would enjoy more from you seeing the quality in this work. I hope you do enjoy writing this as much as I enjoyed reading it. Was the story true or false and did you get the results back in yet?
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Post by Travis on Dec 7, 2008 22:30:05 GMT -5
It was an amazing read, and simply put by you perfect. I would enjoy more from you seeing the quality in this work. I hope you do enjoy writing this as much as I enjoyed reading it. Was the story true or false and did you get the results back in yet? story was pretty much true. might of had an exaggeration here and there. And i won't know what i got on it... for awhile |
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Icarus94
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Captain MacMillain
By the way i ain't your daddy.
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Post by Icarus94 on Dec 14, 2008 21:27:28 GMT -5
Some people might perceive this story as a mistake made by man that led to self enlightenment.
But in my reality, his is a story of a man who made a choice, therefore shaping his future not on the haphazardness of fate, but by selection.
I don't always agree with everything you say Travis,
But you are a commendable man in my opinion.
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Post by Mordiford on Dec 17, 2008 6:29:08 GMT -5
Brilliant work.
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mrfabulous
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As interpreted by David.
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Post by mrfabulous on Dec 17, 2008 14:19:13 GMT -5
Exaggeration or no, this was fantastic. I loved it. =D
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